KIA Ora and welcome back to my blog and if you don't know me my name is Mila and today I'll be showing you my writing. This week my writing group OT1 have been writing persuasive writing and I've done mine on why you shouldn't have junk food at school. But my catchy title is called Sugar High? It tells you a lot about what happens when you have a sugar high. My goal was to individually write a persuasive argument and have some reasons of why you should agree on their opinion.
Sugar High?
First, it gives you a sharp high and then it gives you a really sharp low and it won’t help you learn things at school and the teacher will get mad at you and your parents for buying you junk food for school and putting it in your lunch box.
Second, it is really bad for your teeth and it can cost you a lot of money to get you an appointment at the dentist and probably get some of your teeth taken out if they’re really bad. That’s why you should always brush your teeth when you eat chocolate and sweets because if you don’t brush your teeth after you eat junk food that’s what will happen if you go to the dentist.
Third, the third reason is that when you buy junk food and bring it into school the sweets and chocolate are packaged in little plastic bags so if we drop those bags we have to worry about littering and keeping our environment clean and safe and to make a huge difference for our school.
Fourth, junk food doesn’t keep you full because you will be hungry in about an hour. But if you have nutritious food you will be full and you will be full for longer. Junk food isn’t very good because it’s processed and not real food that your body needs to help you in life and go further. It doesn’t give you the energy your body needs to exercise and keep you healthy and it can make you really sick and sluggish.
Lastly, when you have a sugar high your brain chemicals don’t function properly and they don’t keep you on track and then when you don’t have a sugar high the next day you have to catch up on school work which will be really annoying and then you have to do a lot of homework too. Your parents won’t be happy with you when the teachers tell them about your behaviour at school and how you’re going with your school work and they won’t be impressed with you.
Hi Mila,
ReplyDeleteYou look like you have made a great start on this writing. Just remember when you are posting a blog and copying it from a doc you need to push control, shift and v so that it goes nicely on your page and it's easy to read. Also see if you could make some of your sentences shorter as some of them are quite long.
Keep up the great work Mila!
Mrs Bryce